From: "A-kun McCrillis" Subject: [FFML] [MST] [LEMON] RTeker's story A-kun: Greetings all, I'm here with another quick MST. However, since this one is a short lemon (and because I promised her that I'd let her do a Quick MST with me), I decided to invite my sister into my room. Sorry it took so long, RTeker, but I've been busy and A-chan demanded that we do this at the same time so she wouldn't have to keep reacting to my comments. A-chan: You do realize that this doesn't count as a full Quick MST. A-kun: Look, let's just help the new lemon writer out. >From: RTeker@aol.com >Subject: [FFML] [fanfic][ranma][lemon][short] >Date: Sun, 3 Jan 1999 20:22:34 EST > > >first lemon its short yes butit could be used at some point insomeone elses >ranma fic if they want to A-chan: ............... A-kun: Ahem. Dear RTeker@aol.com, if your capitalization and punctuation is good in an e-mail, people will assume the same is so for your story. On the other hand, if your capitalization and punctuation are hideous, people will ALSO assume the same for the story. It's okay to have one or two mistakes, but if you do your best even typing an e-mail, you look more professional. > >-- Listar MIME Decryption -------------- >-- Name : SENDISC.TXT >-- Decode : from quoted-printable... > > Sensual Discoveries > by RTeker A-chan: .................. A-kun: Sis, you okay? A-chan: .......................... A-kun: Sis? [waves hand in front of A-chan's face.] A-chan: [blinks] Sorry, zoned-out for a while. That first sentence hurt. A-kun: [looks at her] You gonna be okay? A-chan: Yeah, I'll be fine. >Lemon fic >It's a short lemon and its my first A-kun: Translation for those who cannot interpret on their own: It is a short lemon and it is my first story of said literary form. > The full moon invited both Ranma and Akane to let their inhibitions run >wild A-chan: [Akane] Let's run naked across Nerima, singing Barry Manilow's greatest hits! A-kun: [Ranma] YAAAY! Let's eat all the junk food we want! > and allowed the to make love to each other for the first time in their lives. A-chan: OW! That line hurts to read. A-kun: [Ranma] Run little inhibitions! Run wild and FREEEEE! [Ranma to Akane, Ukyou, Nabiki, Kasumi and various other women] Now, LET'S GET IT ON!! A-chan: A better version of that line might be: "The full moon does weird, strange and completely stupid things, like matching Akane up with Ranma. However, since it does such things often, people have to blame either the moon or the Author. In any case, both teens were invited to let their inhibitions go and party like it was 1999, doo-doodoo, doo-doodoo!" A-kun: Or "Ranma and Akane had sex on Akane's bed the afternoon before a full moon. The full moon had nothing to do with anything, I just thought I'd mention it." > They went to Akane's bedroom after a hard day of school, sake in hand A-chan: Yes, after every hard day of school, Japanese students all like to suck down sake like a fish and go into Akane's bedroom. A-kun: [;;O_O;;] All of them go into AKANE'S ROOM!??! > and >wild ideas in mind. The room was a bit chilly from the cracked window, but they made their >own heat. They shared the sake and then moved over to the bed and sat down. A-chan: [Tsubasa as the Bed] AH-HA! Gotcha! Hahaha! By the way, YOU'RE BOTH IT! BWAAAHAHAA! A-kun: And the Cross-Nerima Tag game goes into overtime. > They held each other and looked into each other's eyes. They were actually A-kun: -soused enough to do this! A-chan: ...nah, maybe after another bottle or so. >trembling with excitement. This wasn't going to be your everyday coupling, far from it. A-chan: [rolling her eyes] Suuuure it isn't. A-kun: I think he means that there aren't a lot of aquatransexuals out there. [sees A-chan open her mouth] CANON aquatransexuals. >Ranma unbuttoned her shirt and she unbuttoned his. They lowered themselves till they were >laying down on the mattress as they nibbled and nuzzled each other A-chan: Yeah, yeah. Who cares? A-kun: I care. RTeker is really trying to make a good story. A-chan: You wanna make a good story? Then don't do an idea that's done to death. Sorry, RTeker, but this isn't something new. Maybe if you coupled... say, Ryouga and Tsubasa. That would be interesting to read. A-kun: [;;;;;;;;O_O;;;;;;;;;] WHAT?! > as their hands explored each >other. Their breathing was growing more rapid. A-chan: [checking her watch] By now, most couples are butt-naked and going at it. A-kun: SIS! > Akane played with his chest as she kissed his >neck. She worked her way to his nipples and played with them till they were as erect as >her own nipples. A-chan: Yaaaaaaaawn. A-kun: Sis, be polite. > She then proceeded to massage his chest and stomach. When Akane started to >loosen Ranma's pants, he stopped her. "You A-kun: [Ranma] will be the first to die! A-chan: [O_o] Getting a little dark? >first," he said. > Slowly he removed the rest of her school uniform and then took her panties >off. A-chan: Note to RTeker - Most men remove the BRA too. Because, you know, the BRA isn't part of the school uniform. A-kun: Made it's edible and he's saving it for later. > His gentle touch was making Akan delirious. A-chan: *POOF* Suddenly Ranma has the experience of every porn star in the industry! And *POOF* he has a twelve inch penis! A-kun: *POOF* So does Akane! [realizes what he's said] AAAAAAAAAGH! A-chan: [Darth Vader] Welcome to the Dark Side. And I am your father. A-kun: [Luke Skywalker] Go on, dad wasn't black. A-chan: [Darth Vader] This is a plastic MASK, you dolt! > Ranma reached the tops of her thighs >and spread her legs with his cheek in hand. A-kun and A-chan: [O_O] Say WHAT?! A-kun: So, he spread her legs with HIS cheek in hand? What, is he doing the Macarena? > He eyed her wet, eager pussy, which was quite a >shock to Akane as she never dreamt that that Ranma, A-chan and A-kun: [in unison] King of the British, defeater of the Saxons and general all-around party guy... > an insulting jerk like him would want to eat her out. A-chan: Okay, I know enough about writing to tell you that restating that Ranma as an insulting jerk kind of ruins the mood. Not to mention that the sentence hasn't ended, so adding 'like him' is kind of redudant. > He licked her clit, he sucked, A-kun: Yeah, I've done it better than that. A-chan: [arching eyebrow] Oh, and who was the lucky girl? Or should I say, who was that desperate? A-kun: [reaching for his katana] Now, now, A-chan. You shouldn't insult your brother like that... > his tongue burrowed up inside of her. A-chan: Made a nest and decided that it should tunnel out the rest of the interior for the swimming pool and sauna. A-kun: He spelled 'tongue' right, so he's about twelve marks ahead of most other lemon authors. > She >began to buck, to moan in ecstasy. A-kun: "She began to buck and moan in ecstasy" works much better. > And then he stopped. She begged him to continue, but he >ignored her pleads. A-chan: After all, she had already called him a jerk and snapped his neck, so he decided that just ignoring her was the best way to prove that he was indeed dead. > Akane reached for his pants and pulled them off to reveal the most perfect rock hard cock she >had ever seen in her life. "He truly earns the name of 'Wild Horse'," she thought. A-chan: [choking on her lunch as she dares to make the comment] Yeah, rigor mortis'll do that to a guy. A-kun: [staring at her] How would YOU know?! A-chan: I went through Biology class, A-kun. I know about Rigor Mortis. > She then took him into her mouth as he played with her breasts. A-kun: So, he's DEAD, but he'll have sex with her anyway. > She teased >him, A-chan: [Akane] I've seen HAMSTERS that are bigger! A-kun: [Akane] BESS, the Yamato's FEMALE DOG, is bigger than you! > licked from his balls to the tip of his cock. A-chan: Maybe you should write it like so: "She teased him by licking from his balls to the tip of his cock." > She nibbled and sucked "He taste >wonderful," she thought. A-kun: [Akane] But, I have to say that the football team was more exciting... [shakes out of it and glares at A-chan] STOP THAT! A-chan: [shrugging] What?! > Then Akane took him into her mouth completely down her throat, trying to >please him the best she can. A-chan: Um, be careful, Akane-chan. Puking on Ranma isn't the best way to stay in the mood. > He let her know she was doing just fine, but made her stop. She >pouted, but only for a moment. A-chan: [staring incredulously at the screen] With his in her mouth, she's pouting?! > He put her down onto the mattress and spread her lags, A-chan and A-kun: LEGS! NOT LAGS! > then slowly entered >her. A-chan: Hey, didn't that water goddess do that in the second tape of Dragon Pink? [A-kun gives her a blank stare, even though he knows perfectly well what she's talking about.] > Their bodies became one as they made love. A-kun: [sighing with disgust] Yeah, that's what happens when you ignore that biohazard stickers and chug straight from the barrel. > Akane wrapped her legs around his waist as >he used long, deep thrusts and then slow, circular motions. Akane climaxed with a moan. >Ranma pulled out just in time to send his warm, creamy cum all over her belly and breasts. A-chan: So, they're done in a record 53 seconds. A-kun: Pathetic. A-chan: [arching eyebrow] Oh, you've gone longer? A-kun: A full hour, I'll have you-erk! STOP THAT! > They didn't move, they just held each other. "Ranma, you're unbelievable," >she said. A-kun: So, he killed her too. A-chan: Looks that way. > > The End. A-kun: Not bad for someone new to the lemon scene, but maybe in the future you should strive to be more original in your selection of WHO is involved. A-chan: Yeah. Ranma and Akane, Ranma and Shampoo, Ryouga and Ukyou, Usagi/Serena/Bunny and Mamoru/Darien/Darian, Usagi/Serena/Bunny and Rei/Raye, Minako/Mina and Makoto/Lita have all been done to death. Look for more unusual couples, ones that might never actually ever happen normally and try and make them happen. [notices A-kun staring at her.] What? A-kun: Minako and Makoto!? A-chan: Yeah, these comics-[shows Lunatic Party manga]-seem to like that pairing. A-kun: Um, well anyway, [continues to stare A-chan] that's what we think, RTeker. I'd like to keep the point that this is only a commentary and that you shouldn't take this as an insult. And if, someday, you'd like to return the favor, me and my friends love to get MSTed ourselves, so feel free. A-chan: That's it? A-kun: That's it. Now OUT! [tosses A-chan out the door.] sent out by Ben McCrillis reply at akun15@hotmail.com